Help me correct my essay and get an a

Narrative of the life of frederick douglass:

https://www.gutenberg.org/files/23/23-h/23-h.htm#link2HCH0001

Follow the instruction that I uploaded.

And use the photo that I took to make a good thesis. (Thesis is important)

Use mla form.

I think I have so much body paragraphs and quotes pls correct it and follow this General Essay Writing.

http://www.internationalstudent.com/essay_writing/essay_tips/